Loose Sentence
A loose sentence sets the foremost idea prior to all additional information; in other words, it puts the main idea in the opening, letting the reader know what the sentence is essentially about within the first few words. A Loose Sentence must have a Basic Statement, followed by a string of details.
For Example:
Bells rang, filling the air with their clangor, startling pigeons into flight from every belfry, bringing people into the streets to hear the news.
Basic Statement: Bells rang
Details: filling the air with their clangor, startling pigeons into flight from every belfry, bringing people into the streets to hear the news.
Let's see YOUR Loose Sentence! (;
-Esteban
Here is my Loose Sentence:
ReplyDeleteThe flowers smelled beautiful, their luscious scent lingered throughout the room, luring me in to indulge in their aroma.
-Esteban.
She ran to the departing bus, holding her cap on her head, hugging her notebooks to her chest, losing a few papers on the way.
ReplyDeleteI ran, faster than ever before, until my lungs were burning, until my legs ached and begged for mercy, from the scene of the crime I just committed.
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I drove, faster, the scenes of my life zipping past, the engine roaring, the adrenaline rushing, the speed increasing, until I whizzed out of the life I was so disgusted with.
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I dozed into sleep, the over crowded classroom, the professor's monotone voice, it was inevitable.
ReplyDelete"I wished I could fly, transcending past, present, and future, - all time - and surrender my mind to that beautiful oblivion which so sweetly calls to me."
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He was whispering in my ear, with the smooth breez coming from his lips and the sweet words touching my heart,I will not forget his one last whisper.
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Curtains drew, releasing rays of light into the room, waking the child from his bed.
ReplyDeleteHe yelled, he screamed words of pain and sorrow to the audience, screaming until his lungs and throat felt like they were on fire untill he collapsed on the stage.
ReplyDeleteis this right?